Cliffs of Dunmore

[Sitaruîm]

Hello Peaters, I wrote a poem: Cliffs of Dunmore
Would love some feedback since I'm new at this. I hope you enjoy it.

Cliffs of Dunmore​

Of wind and salt right by the shore
The ocean vast, a gentle path
A lofty place, cliffs of Dunmore
A winding way, low near the waves
Hugged by field and cliff alike
A rusted boat rests by the quay
Longing its fate not be decay

Ever could I lie right by your side
And sway along just like the tide
To caress your golden hair again
And to be free of worries hence
The joy to walk your brightest blossom
And descend upon Portally’s bosom

I once despaired it all seemed over
Stranded in another land
Thoughts I wan’t pleased to have
Coming from my darkest corners

But this one thing I have considered
That it may seem that all things wither
But there’s one thing time cannot beat
And that’s the strength of a willing heart
A heart that shan’t admit defeat
It is therefore good I deem
Full of pride and self-esteem
That I’ll see your every cove again
And feel thy sand beneath my feet

 

[daphne134]

I think this is excellent! The rhythm is solid, the imagery is evocative, and it's uplifting after despair. Thanks for sharing it.

 

[-Luke-]

I'm not an expert and English is not my native language, but I like it very much. Also learned two new word: quay and cove. Feel free to post more if you like.

 

[Lilac]

Very good. I wish I could do half as well.

I looked at your website, too. I especially liked the photos of old Argentina.

 

[Sitaruîm]

Thank you all very much for the kind words